This document discusses revisions being made to a group project between drafts. It notes that filming the curtains opening let in too much light and affected the camera lens. An idea to have papers blow from a desk also proved difficult to film without a strong enough fan. The shadow figure was changed from being seen on a laptop to a television for technical reasons. Ideas for the third draft include adding transitions, filming a special effect for a video camera, making the character look more nerdy, and putting titles on screen during footage rather than on a black screen.

1. ASSIGNMENT 11: REDRAFT #5.
GETTING INTO GROUPS.
Key Code:
Abigail:
Gledis:
Joanne:
Vera:
Group Work:
Group work:

2. Teacher assessment of our second opening
sequence:

3. Feedback of our first opening sequence:

4. Decisions and Revisions.
• While we were making draft two, we came across a
problem that we would face – this was the filming of
the curtains opening.
• We decided not to do this, as when the curtains
opened quickly, too much light flooded into the room
which affected the lens of the camera.
• Also, originally we wanted to have a gust of wind blow
papers from our character’s desk. This proved too
hard to film as we didn’t have a powerful enough
electrical fan.

5. Decisions and Revisions.
• Another decision we had to make whilst filming was
the idea of a shadow figure being seen in the
character’s laptop.
• We couldn’t do this as the laptop couldn’t be switched
off any other way than manually.
• To combat this, we reverted back to the initial idea of
the shadow being seen in the television.

6. New Idea. (for draft three)
• Abigail

7. New Storyboard.

11. New Script.
• Gledis

12. New Shot list.
• Abigail

13. Transitions and special effects.
• For draft three, we want to use cross
dissolve over the text, so it flows nicely.
• We have also considered using a special
effect for the video camera when the
character records herself.
•

14. Changes in character and mise en scene.
• For draft three, we want to make our character
look more nerdy.
• We will accomplish this by using large
oversized glasses, and a simpler costume that
makes her look even less confident than in
the first and second drafts.

15. Titles.
• After making draft two, we realised that the titles on a
black screen didn’t work as well as we initially
thought it would.
• It made the opening sequence too disjointed and
wasn’t appropriate for the type of opening sequence
that we wanted to make as we had a linear narrative.
• For draft three, we want to put our titles on screen
alongside our footage. This will work better as it won’t
break away from what is happening.