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Write a 525- to 750-word paper that addresses the following
topics:
· What is essential (in the practices and beliefs) for a tradition
to be called a religion? Illustrate your points by referring to the
commonalities of at least two different religions.
· What place does religion have in making ethical decisions?
Include specific examples of situations involving ethics faced
by members of a religion today.
· Aside from ethical challenges, what are some contemporary
challenges and issues related to religion?
Include specific examples from the various religious traditions
described in the Week 1 readings, such as a belief in one God or
many gods and goddesses, the removal of one’s shoes before
entering a place of worship, bathing and baptism as methods of
spiritual purification, or refusing to eat certain types of meat.
You may also include examples from your own religious
tradition or another religious tradition with which you are
familiar.
Format your paper according to appropriate course-level APA
guidelines.
Gallego 2
Hillary Gallego
Prof. Gallego
ENGL 1301
9 January 2018
Creative Title
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proves overall claim/thesis statement)
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BROAD – Talk to Bosco. So what? Drop the mic!
Shrestha 1
Manisha Shrestha
Prof. Gallego
ENGL 1302
17 November 2019
· Although punishing children ruthlessly can be barbaric and
disastrous, I argue that non-violent punishment should be used
in appropriate situations, because of the risk of psychological
trauma the child undergoes due to violence, maintain healthy
discipline, and possible alternate methods of rewards to

encourage positive behaviors and prevent negative ones.
CLAIM Punishing children
DATA I will use this quote, “A number of recent studies have
confirmed the widespread use of potentially harmful physical
and psychological punishments in homes, schools and
institutions” as a place of violent punishment to
children(Garb,Yaakov, Tsofit 274).
CLAIM: Psychological Trauma
DATA : I will use the following quote, “Studies from high,
middle, and low-income countries document that…they
continued by stating this borderline personality order, anxiety,
sleep and eating disorders, and suicidal thoughts and attempts”
(Hillis 396)
CLAIM maintain healthy discipline
Data: I will use this quote, “Children’s internal representations
are reflective of their earlier attachment experiences and the
ways in which they internalized those earlier experiences.”(Lee
121)
Warrant:
CLAIM possible alternate methods of rewards
DATA: I will use this quote “an ‘average rating of the week’ is
produced. This determines the pocket money the young people
receive (less money with lower scores)” (Palomares 6)
Conclusion:

Works Cited
Garb, Yaakov, and Tsofit . “Cultural and Ecological Contexts of
Violent Punishment and Restraint of Negev Bedouin Children:
From Understandings to Interventions.” Child Abuse Review,
vol. 19, no. 4, July 2010, pp. 273–290. EBSCOhost,
doi:10.1002/car.1127.
Hillis, Mercy, and Saul. “The Enduring Impact Of Violence
Against Children.” Psychology, Health & Medicine, vol. 22, no.
4. April 2017, pp. 393-405. EBSCOhost, doi:
10.1080/13548506.2016.1153679.
Lee, Young‐Eun, et al. “Do Young Children’s Representations
of Discipline and Empathy Moderate the Effects of Punishment
on Emotion Regulation?” Social Development, vol. 25, no. 1,
Feb. 2016, pp. 120–138. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1111/sode.12141.
Palomares, et al. “Implementing a Point‐Based Rewards System
as an Educational Tool in Children’s Home: From
Standardisation to Coconstruction and Negotiation.” Children &
Society, vol. 32, no. 4, July 2018, pp. 279–289. EBSCOhost,
doi:10.1111/chso.12255.

Essay 1
Why This Essay Gets an A
Topic/Thesis/Content: 19 points
This essay gets 19 points for topic/thesis/content because it
includes an excellent thesis that
acknowledges potential conflicting points of view while
strongly stating the author's own
position. The thesis is then supported by well detailed
paragraphs that define the terms and
explain the quotes the author is using, making their position and
reasoning clear.
Organization: 19 points
This essay gets 19 points because it is logically organized and
easy to follow, moving from an
explanation of the difference between punishment and abuse to
discussing how punishment can
help a child form better decision making, personal discipline,
and finally, better ethics and
morals. Some transitions could be improved, but overall, the
essay flows very well.
Quality of References: 18 points
This essay gets 18 points for quality of references because they
are all excellent, peer-reviewed
sources drawn from the databases.
Use of Sources/MLA Documentation: 18 points
This essay gets 18 points for use of sources and MLA
documentation because it uses all of its
sources well, correctly documents them (even in the instance
where it appears to combine them),

and most importantly, provides detailed explanations of what
the reader should understand from
the quotes provided.
Grammar/Mechanics: 20 points
This essay gets 20 points for grammar and mechanics because it
is well edited and has no
noticeable errors that in any way detract from the author's point.
Total Score: 94
This essay is a solid A for a number of reasons. It is well
thought out, organized, and explained.
Its argument is supported by excellent sources, and these
sources are explained to the reader. Its
only real fault is that it could more clearly define what
"Taibatsu" is, but that is but one of its
details, and the reader still gets a sense of what the author is
discussing. Most importantly, the
author acknowledges that this argument does not exist in a
vacuum. The introduction
acknowledges opposing points of view. The conclusion draws
connections to broader arguments
in society. Overall, this is an A essay because it
conscientiously engages in a dialog about its
topic.
Essay 2

Example “A” Essay
Professor North Lake
English 1301
19 April 2017
The Power of Punishment
Growth is one of the most important parts of being human.
Whether one does something
against what they know is right or not, it is vital that that
individual grows and learns from their
actions. This is what will lead one to thrive in the real world.
For children, there are certain
facets of growing up that encourage this type education and
self-progress to occur. Corporal
punishment plays a necessary role in promoting this ability to
grow and thrive. Although
punishing children too harshly can be destructive, I argue that
punishment is necessary in a
child’s growth because it leads to better decision making,
encourages more discipline, and
promotes better morals.
Although it is evident that punishment can escalate and lead to
outcomes such as physical

or verbal abuse, the pros strongly outweigh the cons. The idea
that corporal punishment can lead
to abusive parental behavior is a huge topic of controversy
among individuals. In the experiment
"The Role of Race in the Association between Corporal
Punishment and Externalizing Problems:
Does Punishment Severity Matter?." conducted by Geneviewe
E. Lapre and Monica A. Marsee,
it is stated that “Although this popular punishment style is often
associated with short-term
obedience (Gershoff 2002), children who experience corporal
punishment may display long term
psychosocial adjustment problems” (Lapre and Marsee 1).
Basically, this is promoting the idea
that punishing children may cause them to follow the rules or
not make the same mistake again
for a while, but it could affect them detrimentally later on. Too
strict of punishment could lead to
Commented [ER1]: This is a very strong thesis. It
acknowledges the opposing point of view while strongly
stating the author's.
Commented [ER2]: The author combines two citations here
which leads to some confusion over which source is saying
what.

Essay 3
possible mental problems for children and emotional distress.
But, this only occurs if corporal
punishment is too severe. Of course, if a parent is abusing their
child either verbally or physically
and leaving marks or scars, the child is going to feel
emotionally and physically unstable. It
would lead most anyone to feel this same way considering the
severity of the punishment. But,
corporal punishment doesn’t mean abuse; or at least it
shouldn’t. It can be mild punishment that
purely pushes an individual in the right path without putting any
psychological or physical harm
on themselves. It can have various benefits, including its ability
to lead to better decision making
in children.
Most every individual strives to make better decisions in their
life. Corporal punishment
can be a major contributor for a child to learn from their
mistake and make a better decision in
the future. In Patrick Lenta’s essay "Corporal Punishment of
Children." he states that

“individuals justify a punishment by identifying the goods that
it can bring—deterrence of
wrongdoing…” (Letna 2). The purpose of this statement is to
highlight the idea that a child that
receives physical punishment from a parent will most likely not
make their wrong decision
again. This is because, of course, punishment is associated with
bad not good. If the parent is
constantly showing warmth and affection, the child may never
change their ways towards better
decision making. The use of this type of punishment will ensure
that children have learned what
they did wrong, and thus will be less likely to make the mistake
again. In reality, knowing that
the decision they made resulted in self penalization, the child
should make future decisions that
will benefit themselves and others. This is just one modest
example of how corporal punishment
can have beneficial long-term effects. Another apparent one is
its ability to send children down
the right path when it comes to self-discipline and direction.
Not only can corporal punishment lead to better decision
making, it can also help ensure

Commented [ER3]: Here the author draws a clear line
between what they consider appropriate punishment and
what they consider abuse. This helps the reader understand
what exactly they mean by those terms.
Commented [ER4]: While it is becoming more and more
acceptable to use "they" as a genderless singular pronoun,
most instructors will still want you to use "his or her" in a
situation like this.
Commented [ER5]: Here the author does an excellent job of
explaining the quote to their readers.
Essay 4
discipline in a child. Disciplining a child is a very important
measure taken to ensure that they
know where they stand as far as rules go. In the article
"Corporal Punishment in Japan." written
by Aaron Miller, Miller discusses how Taibatsu is a form of
corporal punishment used in Japan.
It is stated that “Taibatsu has been used in japan for centuries,
mostly by adult men to socialize
growing boys into ‘proper ways’ of Japanese adult life” (Miller
40). This way of punishment
turns immature young boys into proper young men. It has also
been used for a very long time

(centuries to be exact) leading one to believe that it must be
effective considering it is still in use.
Taibatsu is a form of physical punishment, but that doesn't mean
it is abusive or wrong in any
sense. Not punishing a child can lead this child to believe that
there is nothing they need to fix
because they aren’t doing anything unsound. When in reality,
there is something that needs to be
done. With corporal punishment, it is straightforward and clear
to the child that they have made a
mistake. Thus, not wanting to go through the punishment again,
they will most likely make a
better decision in the future. The same goes for Taibatsu. It is a
very abrupt form of punishment
that effectively molds these boys and teaches them proper ways.
Without this corporal
punishment, it is quite unlikely that individuals would have any
reason to stray from rule
breaking in light of being disciplined. This will most likely lead
to children continuing to break
the rules that are set in place to help them. Not only can
corporal punishment enhance discipline,
it can also lead to a better code of ethics.
Morals are a very important facet of one’s life. They are what

allow individuals to make
the decisions they know in their heart are right. Last but
certainly not least, punishment has the
ability to promote better morals for a child. In Hazel Blum’s
article “Reforming (But Not
Eliminating) the Parental Discipline Defense” she states that
corporal punishment is “a desirable
and necessary instrument of restraint upon sin and immorality”
(Blum 9). It is evident that Blum
Commented [ER6]: The author should be more specific
about what kind of physical punishment is involved in
Taibatsu.
Commented [ER7]: This transition could be stronger if the
author stuck with either ethics or morals. While the two are
closely related, they are not the same.
Essay 5
is reiterating the idea that this form of punishment is a vital part
of keeping children away from
the danger or threat of developing a bad code of ethics.
Children will base much of what they
believe is right or wrong from what they are taught as children
and what they learn from their

parents. If parents don’t provide strict enough punishment or
are far too easy on their children,
then these said kids won’t develop a moral code of what is right
or wrong. If they get a certain
punishment from their parents, this will provide a
straightforward method of letting children
know that a certain action they performed was frowned upon.
Every time the possibility comes
up for the child to make the decision again in their young and
adult life, they will be cognizant of
the memory of getting punished from performing said activity
or pursuing whatever it was that
allowed them to get punished. Thus, they will probably
associate the action that got them in
trouble with being morally wrong. Hopefully this will lead them
to develop morals that they
know are tried and true because of the punishment they received
as children. With the good
morals set in mind, children will most likely be able to use their
mistake to build a better future
life for themselves. As it can clearly be seen, corporal
punishment has a plethora of noticeable
benefits.
Even though abuse is real and can occur, it is obvious that

corporal punishment has many
beneficial outcomes including its ability to help a child make
better decisions, provide them with
more discipline, and encourage a better code of ethics. Parents
today tend to be much less strict
on their children because of issues such as physical abuse that
seem to be headlining all around.
Because of this, children are beginning to lose sight of what
they know is right and lose their
sense of morality. The ubiquitous corporal punishment that used
to be present in most household
is what kept children in line and taught them the rights and
wrongs of life. Without this, children
could develop a decreased work ethic, have less drive, and have
less discipline in future social
Commented [ER8]: This can be cut
Commented [ER9]: This is excellent use of this less
common term
Commented [ER10]: Note how the author reviews their
main points at the beginning of this conclusion.
Commented [ER11]: Note how the author expands here
from their specific argument about punishment to a broader
argument about the decline of society. Connective your
argument to a larger argument is a great way to conclude
your essay.

Essay 6
and formal situations. If people don’t know how to act and
don’t know what to and what not to
do, the world will simply not spin as it should. The question is,
will individuals see the benefits
of corporal punishment and use it to keep this travesty from
occurring?

Essay 7
Works Cited
Blum, Hazel. "Reforming (But Not Eliminating) the Parental
Discipline Defense." University of
Michigan Journal of Law Reform, vol. 49, no. 4, Summer2016,
pp. 921-948.
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ehost-live.
Lapré, Genevieve and Monica Marsee. "The Role of Race in the
Association between Corporal
Punishment and Externalizing Problems: Does Punishment
Severity Matter?." Journal of
Child & Family Studies, vol. 25, no. 2, Feb. 2016, pp. 432-441.
EBSCOhost,
doi:10.1007/s10826-015-0250-3.
Lenta, Patrick. "Corporal Punishment of Children." Social
Theory & Practice, vol. 38, no. 4,
Oct. 2012, pp. 689-716. EBSCOhost,
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Miller, Aaron L. "Corporal Punishment in Japan." Anthropology
in Action, vol. 23, no. 1,
Spring2016, pp. 39-45. EBSCOhost,
doi:10.3167/aia.2016.230106.
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