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1. Veganism: A philosophy and way of living.
Veganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the
exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary
is a global campaign that launched in January 2014(1*) to help encourage people
to try vegan for January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in
January 2014(2*), the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise
awareness of this lifestyle.
Veganism not only helps to reduce the suffering of animals and help the planet
but also improves personal health. Due to the fact vegans do not eat animals or
their products, they must find the essential nutrients they need from plant based
sources, vegan alternatives and fortified foods. This means that vegans eat a lot
more fruits and vegetables than omnivores. Vegans get the most amount of
nutrients they can from their food and are keen to make sure they know how to
get everything they need such as iron. However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that
can be hard for vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by
bacteria but is also added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. A
supplement of B12 is the easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet.
Not only do vegans tend to be more well informed of what their body needs and
what their food contains but avoiding meat and animal products can help to
virtually eliminate the most severe diseases such as cardiovascular disease,
obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and e.coli infections. A vegan diet can be
more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become less intense or disappear
altogether (3*). This is due to the elimination of dairy from their diet.
Veganism helps the environment and helps to stop excess greenhouse gases.
Over 70 billion land animals such as cows, pigs and chickens are specifically
bred, farmed and killed for food every year. (4*) This does not include sea
creatures and other animals bred for fur and skin trades. The meat industry has
a big impact on the environment and how use our natural resources. 70% of the
fresh water produced is used for the meat industry and takes 2500 gallons of
water for 1 pound of beef. (5*) This is equivalent to 100 pounds of wheat. 70% of
the worlds grain harvest is fed to livestock while the other 30% is used for the
entire worlds population. (6*) Only 50% of grain harvest could feed all the
starving people in the world if only people would stop eating meat. (7*)
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A vegan diet can be more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become less
intense or disappear altogether. This is due to the elimination of dairy from their
diet.  A vegan diet can be more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become
less intense or disappear altogether; this is due to the elimination of dairy from
their diet.
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2. Fortified foods  Food enrichment
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Vegans get the most amount of nutrients they can from their food and are keen
to make sure they know how to get everything they need such as iron  Vegans
tend to get the most from the food they eat as they take into consideration what
vitamins and minerals are in what foods, by doing this it means they know more
about the food they’re eating and what it contains.
Not only do vegans tend to be more well informed of what their body needs and
what their food contains but avoiding meat and animal products can help to
virtually eliminate the most severe diseases such as cardiovascular disease,
obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and e.coli infections.  Vegans are
generally better informed of what is vital to maintain a healthy diet, by
eliminating meat and dairy products it means their risks of being diagnosed with
severe diseases such as obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and e.coli
infections are significantly reduced.
Fact Checking
1*- Correct, this information found on veganuary.com
2*- Correct, the information can be found on the BBC news website.
3*- Correct, information can be found on
4*- Correct, this information can be found on freefromharm.org
5*- Correct, the information can be found on cowspiracy.com
6*- Partially correct, only found information for the grain used in the US
7*- Correct, this information can be found on cowspiracy.com
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Veganism: A philosophy and way of living.
Veganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the
exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary
is a global campaign that launched in January 2014 to help encourage people to
try vegan for January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January
2014, the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise awareness
of this lifestyle.
Veganism not only helps to reduce the suffering of animals and help the planet
but also improves personal health. Due to the fact vegans do not eat animals or
their products, they must find the essential nutrients they need from plant based
sources, vegan alternatives and enriched foods. This means that vegans eat a lot
more fruits and vegetables than omnivores. Vegans tend to get the most from the
food they eat as they take into consideration what vitamins and minerals are in
what foods, by doing this it means they know more about the food they’re eating

3. and what it contains. However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that can be hard for
vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by bacteria but is also
added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. A supplement of B12 is the
easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet.
Vegans are generally better informed of what is vital to maintain a healthy diet,
by eliminating meat and dairy products it means their risks of being diagnosed
with severe diseases such as obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and e.coli
infections are significantly reduced. A vegan diet can be more beneficial to
women as PMS symptoms become less intense or disappear altogether; this is
due to the elimination of dairy from their diet.
Veganism helps the environment and helps to stop excess greenhouse gases.
Over 70 billion land animals such as cows, pigs and chickens are specifically
bred, farmed and killed for food every year. This does not include sea creatures
and other animals bred for fur and skin trades. The meat industry has a big
impact on the environment and how use our natural resources. 70% of the fresh
water produced is used for the meat industry and takes 2500 gallons of water for
1 pound of beef. This is equivalent to 100 pounds of wheat. (PULL QUOTE) 70%
of the United States grain harvest is fed to livestock while the other 30% is used
for the entire US’s population. Only 50% of grain harvest could feed all the
starving people in the world if only people would stop eating meat.
Overall Veganism has a lot of positive outcomes ranging from health benefits and
protection against specific diseases, to saving land and feeding more people from
the food we produce rather than feeding it back into the livestock to simply
fatten them up. Why not try Veganism for a month? Find out more at
veganuary.com