This is the presentation Daniel Maddux gave at the October 1, 2014 meeting of the Greater Houston Chapter of APMP. It received the highest rating for a presentation in the chapter's history.
2. Scope/responding to
the actual
requirement
17%
Inadequate reviews
11%
Other
11%
Overly
complicated
17%
Schizophrenic
11%
Embarrassing
boilerplate
Vendor-focused
11%
11%
Glaring text
errors
11%
Biggest
Problems
with Text
3. What is the biggest problem
with the writing in proposals?
Content that is not compliant! I can't tell you the number of
times I get content that does not follow the outline provided,
does not answer the question fully, or completely ignores the
page requirements.
Jeannette Waldie, CPP APMP
Owner at J. K. Waldie & Associates
6. …Perhaps the most common problem, however,
is that a well-intentioned and informed writer
simply fails to get the message across to an
intelligent, interested reader. In that case, stilted
jargon and complex constructions are usually the
villains.
Warren Buffet
preface to the SEC Plain English handbook
7. REMEDIES
key question
Does it make
sense the first
time you read it?
tool any others?
Use metrics.
10. One the biggest problems with the text in proposals?
Talking about your own company WAY TOO MUCH! The
focus should be on the client. I try to use the rule of
using your clients' name three times more than your
own.”
Krissy Chaney
Proposal Writer at RTL Networks, Inc
11. REMEDIES
key question
How many times
did you use the
customer’s
name vs. yours?
tool any others?
Plan the focus
up front.
Prioritize key
sections.
18. Different authors may yield different
styles or voice. These differences may
also manifest themselves with the facts ...
Somebody has to do a “horizontal
alignment” check.
Al Pena
Principal at A&M CoOp
19. REMEDIES
key question
Do we have a
pre-existing
standard?
tool
Make sure
you do!
Have a rational
workflow.
any others?
22. Nothing says "I don't give a fig"
like calling the customer Acme
Manufacturing when their name
is Amalgamated International.
Peter Baron
Head of Bid Management at Bull Information Systems
23. REMEDIES
key question
Which parts do
we need to
customize
for each
customer?
tool any others?
Have a list of key
text to customize.
Use standard terms.