Proofreading and rewriting for an author

1. 20 July 2020
By Charmaine Pringle
This is an intro to a book, Life’s Biggest Punishment, rewritten to increase online sales.
Content after rewriting:
Life’s Biggest Punishment is a true story of how a botched circumcision ultimately led a young man to
take his own life. It is a must-read for all parents.
Gary looks perfectly normal. Except he is living with a crippling disability: borderline Cerebral Palsy.
Being diagnosed at not 100% disabled means that he does not receive the compassion and support
that every disabled child deserves. Instead, Gary is shunned by his friends and family.
Even his own father, who is a kind and honest man, is pitted against Gary, despite the fact that the
father is repeatedly told of his son's disabilities. The events that follow Gary's isolating and
misunderstood youth are almost too horrific to contemplate.
Share in the experiences of a mother who never gave up searching for the truth about her son’s
circumcision and disability, and of how she made meaning of life after his suicide.
If this memoir can help anyone not go through the difficulties or punishment that I have gone through,
it will be worthwhile to have been able to assist you.
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Content before rewriting
If you are noticeably disabled you are given the compassion you deserve.
If you look perfectly normal, but are diagnosed at not 100%. you do not get the compassion you
deserve from family and friends and are shunned Less
A respectable, kind, decent and honest man, was put against his own child to such an extent, even
though he was advised time and again of the child's disabilities, What happened due to this is mind
boggling.
I weighed 47 Kg most of my life. Within a few days I shot up to 64Kg (gained 17Kg.) My friends told me
to stop eating. I wasn't eating, as a matter of fact I was eating less than usual. How I lost 12Kg was
extremely painful, but it just happened.
Fortunately my Doctor advised me what happened!!!