2nd feedback for draft 1 of film review

1. Molly Smith
Draft 1 of Review (Little White Lies)
What’s that? You want to hear me ramble about Little Red Riding Hood again? After
Catherine Hardwicke’s success with ‘Red Riding Hood’ (in 2011), I bet you thought
we wouldn’t have another bloodcurdling red-hot fairy tale for a long time. Yet this
chilling fairy tale (use another word for fairy tale, used a lot
already), ‘Redemption’, will make the hairs on your back stand up.
This time Smith, Hamid and Sivalingam are back after their magnificent action-
packed film franchise ‘Avoidance’ in this deep, dark, daunting fantasy turning Emily
Redif (known for her award-winning drama ‘The Diary of
Molly-Ann’), into a kind, defenceless teenager with a spine-chilling shadow
lurking behind her.
In this film you don’t have to have razor sharp claws and a huge mouth filled with
cut-throat penetrating teeth to be one; you just need to be a cold-hearted,
manipulative, delusional maniac, in the form of Rak (played by….) a
disjointed, hungry teenager.
Moved paragraph about film narrative here as it needs to
be earlier….This gnashing fairy-tale has a few conventions of Little Red Riding
Hood, but it seems to manipulate the glory and pleasantness, in a way that still
allows us to peek through our guarding palms.
Young, vulnerable teenager Emily is in modern-day society and is distressed that her
Grandma is dying in hospital. Her journey to see her Grandma is interrupted by a so-
called ‘friend’ from school. Due to Emily’s distressing time, Emily gets talking to the
disjointed, hungry ‘Rak’ (played by….). This soon leads to
some hedonistic ‘playtime’, in the form of ‘fairy dust’, and
she awakens, wearing a Red Riding Hood outfit.Her journey
through the forest then begins.
Moved cinematography paragraph here-flows better- The
cinematography in this film is gripping and the use of non-diegetic sounds gets you
on your feet with it’s realistically, intense sounding effects.
New paragraph-Smith, Hamid and Sivalingam support feminism in this
gruesome tale, and the saviour is a female runner.- Do you need to tell us
this??? This film will definitely entice you to watch more and maybe even make
you tremble like a leaf. In future I suggest you think twice about a walk in the forest.

2. Molly Smith
And most of all this film will make you look behind you when walking down the
streets at night.
Anticipation; Smith, Hamid and Sivalingam deliver?? unexpected turn in this
fairy-tale. (4)
Enjoyment: Rak’s creepy, dead-eyed coldness will surely make you re-think your
friends. (3)
In retrospect: Who let the dogs out? (3)
Word count, minus my comments- 370 roughly, this is workable. Good
draft!! Just make these changes and have a think about the sections I
have deleted- just felt that they didn’t add anything to the review or
revealed too much about the plot…..