1. AUDIENCE FEEDBACK
These are a few things I’ve been told by my audience that I should try and
improve on to make my music video stronger.

2. ANCHOR NARRATIVE TO AUDIENCE
• At the minute, I’ve been told my narrative is rather unclear to a few people in
my audience. What my aim to do is really make my audience relate to the
narrative, as my audience is the age where waking up with a hangover is a
likely scenario. What I plan on doing is making it more clear to the audience
how Sam is feeling, by adding in shots to do with feeling horrible, for
instance, cross cutting the blurry shot and Sam rubbing his eyes iat the
bottom and top of stairs. I also plan on reshooting the waking up scene, and
making it look as though Sam is feeling utterly terrible, as apposed to the
scene at this current time where he looks like he’s had a reasonably good
sleep.

3. ESTABLISH NARRATIVE WITH MIS EN SCENE
• Something which I’ve also been informed is that my mis en scene for the
opening shot doesn’t fit the narrative. Originally this scene was shot in my
friend Poppy’s bedroom, so it was a girls room, and ideally I need a guys
room. Also in the bedroom scene you can see there’s an apple on the desk,
when I really need something like a beer bottle. I will reshoot the bedroom
scene in Sam’s own bedroom. I was also told that someone thought I had
made Sam wake up in a girls room on purpose, suggesting he had a one
night stand which really isn’t what I was going for, so hopefully using his own
room will improve my mis en scene and make more sense to my audience.

4. MAKE NARRATIVE STRONGER IN SCENES
Like the bedroom scene, I also need to make the narrative
stronger in his walking shots. We are aware that he is walking
into town for a cornetto, but someone feedbacked that through
the narrative of the walk, the initial reason for wanting to get
into town was lost. What I plan to do is reinforce the narrative
throughout. I haven’t decided how I will do this yet, but I will
probably cut to some shots of cornettos.