2. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
Follow these steps as you
start working on your
paragraph. Page 68
3. cafeteria
lower tuition
more English
books
healthier food
happy teachersnew car
What should
Soongsil do
to be a better
university?
Step 1 Brainstorm
Step 1 Brainstorm
Write down as many ideas
as you can about the topic.
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Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
4. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
Remember to check the
appropriate box as you
complete each step.
6. Group 1
library
organize books
more English books
more new books
Group 2
lower tuition
less stress for family
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
Group 4
cafeteria
healthier food
cheaper food
Step 1 Narrow your Focus
Group similar ideas from your
brainstorming and write them here.
Then choose one group with the
topic that you are most interested
in. Page 70
7. Group 1
library
organize books
more English books
more new books
Group 2
lower tuition
less stress for family
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
Group 4
cafeteria
healthier food
cheaper food
Step 1 Narrow your Focus
Group similar ideas from your
brainstorming and write them here.
Then choose one group with the
topic that you are most interested
in. Page 70
8. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
9. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
_________________________________________________________________
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ____________________________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): ____________________________________________
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
Review the subject, your
brainstorming and focus notes.
Then, write a topic sentence.
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10. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
_________________________________________________________________
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ____________________________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
In a persuasive paragraph, the
topic sentence is generally
your opinion about the subject.
11. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
_________________________________________________________________
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ____________________________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
12. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ____________________________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
13. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ____________________________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
14. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________
Detail 2 ____________________________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
15. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________
Detail 2 ___happy teachers_____________________________
Detail 3 ____________________________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
16. Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)
In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
Three supporting details:
Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________
Detail 2 ___happy teachers_____________________________
Detail 3 ___better teachers_____________________________
Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?
Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence
Group 3
higher teacher pay
better teachers
buy more things
time to prepare lessons
happy teachers
more clothes, car
17. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
18. g
Step 2 Create a Brain Map
buy more
things
better
teachers
Soongsil
should
increase
teachers’ pay
to be a better
university.
happy
teachers
more time to
prepare
lessons
new car
more clothes
higher
qualifications
better for
students
higher grades
good
impression
confident
teachers
get to school
faster
satisfied
teachers
happy
students
students
benefit
Write the 3 main details and any
examples or facts from your
brainstorm and focus notes on this
map. This will help you to visualize
your paragraph. Page 72
Topic Sentence
19. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
20. Step 2 Complete an Outline
I. Introduction
A. (opening statement) _______________________________________________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. (topic sentence) ___________________________________________________
C. Preview
i. (detail 1) _________________________________________________
ii. (detail 2) _________________________________________________
iii. (detail 3) ________________________________________________
II. (Detail 1) _______________________________________________________________
A. ________________________________________________________________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. ________________________________________________________________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. ________________________________________________________________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
Create your outline here. Use
key words and phrases. You
do not have to write complete
sentences. Page 73
21. III (Detail 2) ______________________________________________________________
A. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
IV. (Detail 3) ______________________________________________________________
A. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. _______________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
V. Conclusion
A. (summary) ______________________________________________________
B. (challenge) ______________________________________________________
C. (memento) ______________________________________________________
There are many lines for
details. You may not need all
of them. Use only those that
you need.
22. Step 2 Complete an Outline
I. Introduction
A. (opening statement) _________improving Soongsil is important_____________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. (topic sentence) Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university._______
C. Preview
i. (detail 1) _______________ buy more things____________________________
ii. (detail 2) _______________happy teachers_____________________________
iii. (detail 3) _______________better teachers ____________________________
II. (Detail 1) _______________ buy more things____________________________________________
A. ____new car_______________________________________________________________
i. _____________saves time___________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. ____get to school faster______________________________________________________
i. _____________public transportation slower______________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. ____more time to prepare lessons______________________________________________
i. _________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
You should write your topic
sentence in full sentence form.
23. III. (Detail 2) _________________happy teachers__________________________________________
A. _____more clothes_________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. _____good impression_______________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. _____confident teachers_____________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
IV (Detail 3) ________________better teachers____________________________________________
A. ____higher qualifications_____________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
B. ____better for students______________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
C. ____higher grades__________________________________________________________
i. ________________________________________________________
ii. ________________________________________________________
V. Conclusion
A. (summary) ______________________________________________________
B. (challenge) ___________contact university_____________________________________
C. (memento) ___________small step big difference_______________________________
24. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
25. Paragraph – first draft
Paragraph – first draft
_______________________ (title)
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
Write the first draft of the
paragraph you have been
planning here. Page 75
26. Higher Pay for Teachers
Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my
opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things,
they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____
teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes
three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able
to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow
them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be
happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people
who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____
university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were
happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____
qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____
higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university.
Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better
and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways.
Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a
small step to take to make a big difference.___________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
Paragraph – first draft
Do not worry about making
mistakes. The first draft does not
need to be perfect. Focus on
developing your ideas and support
for your topic sentence.
27. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
28. Higher Pay for Teachers
Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my
opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things,
they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____
teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes
three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able
to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow
them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be
happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people
who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____
university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were
happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____
qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____
higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university.
Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better
and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways.__
Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a___
small step to take to make a big difference.__________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
Paragraph – first draft
Now you will read through your
paragraph and look for
mistakes.
29. Step four – editing
Structural Edits Logical Edits
All sentences end with . ! ? The topic sentence is strong
and easy to understand.
All sentences have a subject
and verb; subject-verb
agreement (I go, she goes)
The introduction is interesting to
the reader.
The first word of every sentence,
proper names, and
abbreviations are capitalized.
Check for problems with I, it, if,
in, and is.
The title is clear, strong, related
to the paragraph.
Each new paragraph is
indented.
Every sentence is directly
related to the topic sentence.
There are no fragments or
clauses without sentences.
Check any sentence that starts
with Because, Since, or So to be
certain it is okay.
Facts, statistics, and other
factual data have the source
listed (According to the Oxford
International Dictionary…)
Plural nouns are used when
referring to general things. (I like
kittens. Students need to
study.)
Details are interesting and
related to the topic.
They’re, their, there are all used
correctly.
The supporting ideas are
arranged in the best order
(strongest last, chronological,
etc)
For example, for instance, like,
and such as are used correctly.
The conclusion has a summary
of the main ideas.
Adjectives and nouns are not
confused. (She has an activity
active personality.)
The conclusion has a strong
closing statement (memento).
Pronouns are used instead of
repeating nouns. (The monkey is
in the tree. The monkey It is very
cute.)
Use this checklist to help you
with this process. Page 76
30. Higher Pay for Teachers
Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my
opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.
There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things,
they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____
teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes
three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able
to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow
them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be
happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people
who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____
university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were
happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____
qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____
higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university.
Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better
and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways.__
Contact the university today and ask for higher pay for teachers. It’s a___
small step to take to make a big difference.__________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
Paragraph – first draft
There are 6 mistakes. Can you
find them?
31. Higher Pay for Teachers
Many student s
agree that improving Soongil University is______
important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a__
better university. There are several reason s
for my opinion; teachers could
buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better
teachers. first, teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public_____
transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if
teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster.
This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly,____
teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According
to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more__
confident. The university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their
teachers were happy, good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers
with higher qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students
to get higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved___
university. Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them______
to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will_____
benefit in many ways. Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_
for teachers. It’s a small step to take to make a big difference.___________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
Paragraph – first draft
32. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
33. Higher Pay for Teachers
Many students agree that improving Soongil University is______
important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a__
better university. There are several reasons for my opinion; teachers could
buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better
teachers. First, teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public_____
transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if
teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster.
This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly,____
teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According
to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more__
confident. The university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their
teachers were happy, good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers
with higher qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students
to get higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved___
university. Making it possible for teachers to buy more helps them________
to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will_____
benefit in many ways. Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_
for teachers. It’s a small step to take to make a big difference.___________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
Step five – revising | second draft
34. Paragraph Assessment
Step 1 Pre-writing
Get topic from instructor
Brainstorm ideas about topic
Narrow your focus
Step 2 Planning
Write topic sentence
Create brainstorming map
Complete an outline
Step 3 Drafting
Write the first (rough draft)
Step 4 Editing
Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day
Read your paragraph carefully
Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read
Step 5 Revising
Fix the mistakes from Step 4
Write next draft of your paragraph
