1. BRAINSTORMING
Violence. damage
Aggressive
.
Problem.
Thesis statement:
The violence is a social problem and it causes a lot of damage in México.
Topic sentence 1:
Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México.
Topic sentence 2
The damages that violence causes are physical, psychological and emotional.

2. OUTLINE
Violence in Mexico.
Introduction.
1. Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the
majority of victims are women.
2. The domestic violence is the most common in our country.
3. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.
4. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages.
5. In México we need new laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.
Body Paragraph 1
1. Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México.
2. For example, “Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to
revenge killings”. Jose Luis Lacarriere (Dnonald, 2011).
3. I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to make
campaigns against violence.
4. We should be more respectful with other people, try to control ourselves to
prevent violence.
5. Violent people are like that because they want to feel more powerful than others
hurting people.
Body Pargraph 2
1. The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional.
2. For example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of
violence or at least one member of the family has been victim of a crime”
(Pereyra & Luis, 205).
3. Any kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about
that, if every person do that we can control this problem.
4. To eliminate this social problem we don’t have to tolerate any violence.
5. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against this big problem.
Conclusion
1. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México.
2. We need to be united to destroy the problem.
3. This problem almost always starts at home with the parents.
4. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too strong.
5. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

3. ROUGH DRAFT
Violence in Mexico
Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the
majority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in our
country. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.
The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need new
laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.
Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,
“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”
(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to
make campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, try
to control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they want
to feel more powerful than others hurting people.
The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. For
example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or at
least one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Any
kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if every
person do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’t
have to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against
this big problem.
The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. We
need to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at home
with the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too
strong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

4. Bibliografía
Dnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, de
http://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more-flack-from-
gray-lady/
Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .

5. PEER REVIEW-
APA FORMAT (1 POINT EACH)
1. Does student have a cover page?
YES or NO
WRITING PROCES
2. Does student use double space?
11. Brainstorming (4 POINTS)
YES or NO
Student focused his or her ideas, got the
3. Does student use ARIAL ? thesis statement and topic sentence .
YES or NO YES or NO
4. Does student use font 12? 12. Outline (1POINT)
YES or NO Student organized his or her essay in an
outline format (5X4)
5. Does student have margins set to APA
standards? YES or NO
YES or NO 13. Draft/Peer review (1POINT)
SPECIFICATIONS (1 POINT EACH) Student has a draft reviewed by a peer.
6. Does student have 4 paragraphs? Yes /No
YES or NO 14. Final draft (1 POINT)
7. Does student have 20 sentences (5 in Student made corrections according to his
each paragraph)? or her Peer recommendations.
YES or NO YES or NO
8. Does student use a printed resource?
YES or NO
9. Does student have an electronic
resource?
YES or NO
10. Does student have a bibliography APA
format?
YES or NO

6. 1
Running head: Violence in Mexico
Violence in Mexico
Oscar Ramos Pérez
Universidad del Valle de México
Group: 5T

7. 2
Violence in Mexico
Violence in Mexico
Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the
majority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in our
country. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.
The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need new
laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.
Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,
“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”
(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to
make campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, try
to control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they want
to feel more powerful than others hurting people.
The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. For
example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or at
least one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Any
kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if every
person do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’t
have to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against
this big problem.
The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. We
need to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at home

8. 3
Violence in Mexico
with the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too
strong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

9. 4
Violence in Mexico
References
Dnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, de
http://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more-
flack-from-gray-lady/
Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .