Revision powerpoint

1. What does it mean
toRevise?
Blogging to promote understanding!

2. What is Revision?
 “Revision is like a second chance because it lets you discover
what you were trying to say all along.” ~ Susan Goodman
 “Revision is like drawing, because you erase and shade in the
details.” ~ Chrissa Chappell
 “Revision involves rethinking not what a piece of writing
is, but what it might become.” ~ Kate Messner
 Talk with the person next to you, how do you define revision?
How is revision different than editing?

3. Advice from author Kate Messner
 “Revision requires time to consider roads not traveled in the
first draft. It often involves collaboration and discussion. It
can include sticky notes, index cards, computerized
comments, colored pencils, highlighters, and messes. Always
messes. And always time.”
 Let’s look at the following profile page taken from a blog
about blogging. What do you notice about this profile?

4. Sample Profile Page
 About Me
 Rebecca resides in Dallastown, PA with her husband and two
daughters (Raina - age 6; Story - age 2). For the past 12 years she
has taught English Literature, Creative Writing, and Public
Speaking at various high schools in Minnesota, Philadelphia and
now in Red Lion, PA. Currently, she is loving her summer life at
home with her little family and her pug, Loki. In her spare time she
loves reading contemporary literature and memoirs about crazy
people, taking long walks, doing yoga, watching So You Think You
Can Dance (yup), writing, and although it is embarrassing she loves
to do laundry (this is not a joke). She hopes to one day find balance
in her life.

5. Tips from Kate Messner
 1. Say something positive first.
 2. Tell the reader what you’re taking away from your reading
of the piece.
 3. Be specific in your feedback.
 4. Note places where the writer might want to add sensory
details.
 5.Don’t be afraid to point out where things don’t make sense.
 6. Wrap up on a positive note.

6. Revision Round 2
 Now that you have read Kate Messner’s strategy list, what
advice do you now have for this blogger?

7. Sample Profile Page
 About Me
 Rebecca resides in Dallastown, PA with her husband and two
daughters (Raina - age 6; Story - age 2). For the past 12 years she
has taught English Literature, Creative Writing, and Public
Speaking at various high schools in Minnesota, Philadelphia and
now in Red Lion, PA. Currently, she is loving her summer life at
home with her little family and her pug, Loki. In her spare time she
loves reading contemporary literature and memoirs about crazy
people, taking long walks, doing yoga, watching So You Think You
Can Dance (yup), writing, and although it is embarrassing she loves
to do laundry (this is not a joke). She hopes to one day find balance
in her life.

8. Breaking into Editing Groups
 We are breaking into 3 writing groups today. Your job is to
listen with the intent to understand. Each person will share
their blog profile draft. Be ready to respond with suggestions
and positive comments. I will keep the list of suggestions
posted on the white board as we work.
 You may use pens, high lighters or post its to revise your work
in your notebook, or use a highlight font on your iPad notes.
 Once we have completed this revision process, we will move
to setting up our blog pages on The North School Writing
Club.