A student named Janan Kolcak proposes ideas for an original horror film titled "Nightmare on Bury Campus." The plot involves a haunted school with a killer teacher and a crazy girl named Mary who died at the school and now kills people. The main characters would be Mary, the heroine Chloe who saves the school, and Chloe's sister Janan. In the opening, the new student Sarah would be led to the science lab by Mary and killed. Peer feedback on the initial idea was positive, praising the level of detail, though noting it could use more problems outlined.

1. By Janan kolcak

2. 1st scriptJanan kolcak Jupiter 1.
Initial production ideas for an original horror film
Title: nightmare on bury campus.
Tagline: the more the fear the more the pain will you survive……
Subgenre: Slasher
Brief synopsis of plot of whole film: haunted school with a crazy girl that died in the school. Teacher
killer and boils kids.
Main characters: Mary: the crazy girl that kills people.
Chloe: the heroine that saves the school.
Janan: Chloe’s younger sister that people thinks she is crazy because she saw Mary in her lab class mixing
chemicals to make a huge bang.
Sarah: a new year 7 that dies in the beginning because of Mary can she be her evil meaning.
Miss Portelli: she tells Chloe and Janan that that Mary does exist and Mary has been haunting her for her
whole life ever since year 7 then dies the next day.
Opening settings/location: school, school office school playground. Basically whole school.
Characters involved in opening: The new year 7 Mary Janan Chloe and Miss Portelli.
Description of opening narrative: the new year 7 loses her way in school and asks Mary because
Mary transforms into a school girl Mary takes her to the science laboratory where nobody is there
then in a click the new year 7 is in a pot of acid dyeing slowly and painfully.
Costumes and props: school uniform and old dirty night gown a plastic knife.
Potential problems: who is going to play Mary? Who is going to be the innocent year 7? Who is
going to play Miss Portelli?

3. 2nd script
Janan kolcak Jupiter 1.
Initial production ideas for an original horror film
Title: think of me
Tagline: go to the army and see more death are you next……
Subgenre: slasher
Brief synopsis of plot of whole film: a group of teenagers go army and its in the forest. One
man goes toilet and dies. Five out of ten people are alive half way in the film they are
scared of the scary man. Out of no where the scary man comes running past and the
people stat shooting their captain as they are trying to shoot the scary man. In the end
two people survive but never go home so it sounds like they died but instead they had ran
away.
Main characters: 2 people that survive and the scary man.
Opening settings/location: A forest and an army car.
Characters involved in opening: army people scary man.
Costume and props: army car scary mans clothes army costume.
Potential problems: every thing.

4. 3rd scriptJanan kolcak Jupiter 1.
Initial production ideas for an original horror film
Title: The pain
Tagline: has your relative died but gave you the past…….
Subgenre: slasher
Brief synopsis of plot of whole film: the father murders his daughter. Then it is her little
brothers birthday as he is getting dressed. The sisters ghost covered in blood scars and
everything. She grabs the little brothers leg and gives the brother the video of how she
got beaten to death by her father.
Main characters: brother, sister and father.
Opening settings/location: in a room full of stacked chairs and a door with loads of nail
scratching.
Characters involved in opening: the father tells the daughteer she is pushing his temper
becauseshe is going out with a boy then he beats her to death.
Costume and props: chairs, door with scratches and house.
Potential problems: the house the room and the characters.

5. Peer assessed workInitial idea 1:
Ideal title 1: nightmare on bury campus.
Tag line: the more the fear the more the pain…….
Mark out of 10: 8/10
Pros- she wrote a lot of information about her story well.
- Expand her story well.
Cons-
- Needs to write more problems.
Overall comments:
The story was good.
Initial idea 2:
Ideal title: think of me.
Tagline go to the army and see more death are you next……..
Mark out of 10:7/10
Pros: - She put a lot of information.
cons: - detail.
Overall comments: good story
Initial idea 3:
Ideal title: the pain.
Tagline: have your relative died but gave you the past
Mark out of 10: 8/10
Pros: - good title and story line
Cons :- more detail
Overall comments: good story line.

6. Photo for peer assessment

7. Story board photo graphed

8. Script for the beginning
1A. INT.
SCARY MUSIC THEME WITH CAST LYRICS ON BOTTOM COLOURED WHITE. CLOSE UP OF THE BACK OF THE
BACK OF MARY’S HEAD.
OVER THE SHOULDER MARY AND HER DAD. THIS IS MARYS PAST.
DAD
I am here because your head teacher called me.
MARY
Dad I want to go please please please I want to play with my friends please.
DAD
NO WE HAVE TO GO TO YOUR HEAD TEACHER AND THAT’S THAT.
MARY
I... I... I... am really sorry. Dad I didn’t mean to get rude to you. I said please.
DAD
I know now I forgive you.
MARY
Dad we are going to the lab do you know???
DAD
Yes I know your school by now.
(CAMERA GOES ALL BOUNCY. YOU HEAR MARY SCREAM AND THEN YOU SEE HER DEAD ON THE FLOOR. DAD
TAKES HER TO THE SCIENCE LAB AND KILLS HER).
(FIVE YEARS GO PASS).

9. Script photo graphed

10. The things I need
 More people.
 A nightgown.
 To ask for permission.
 Camera.
 Creepy music.
 Fake blood.
 A teacher.
 Accessories (jewellery).
 School entrance, science lab, playground and classes.
 Tripod (for camera)
 Props Dark eye make up.
 Brief make up.

11. Props and costumes
 Red make up affect of blood.
 Powder.
 Knife.
 Nightgown.
 Fake blood.
 Make up (e.g. foundation, mascara, eyeliner.)

12. Budget:
 My budget will be £25. This is the limit because it is
high and it is the average.

13. Health and safety
What are the
hazards?
Describe who is at risk
and how they may be
harmed?
What will be
done to
control the
risk?
Action by whom?
equipment:
Because of the wires
people can fall. Wet
surface people can
slip.
Actors at risk because they
can fall over or slip.
They can:
• break a leg or arm.
• they can act by avoiding
the wires and wet floor.
Staff
supervision.
No wet floors.
Put wires to a
side safely.
Me.
Weather:
If it rains I would not
be able to use the
play ground.
Actors can slip and break a
leg or back or fall straight on
their but and hurt them
selves.
To change the
date if it is
rainy.
Me.
Theft:
If there is theft it is
going to be hard
because the camera
and the money will
be stolen.
There will be no film just a
plain old boring day.
Travel in
groups.
Adult
supervision.
Me.

14. SELL IT!!!!!!
Do you like horror films because if you like spine chilling
horrific and jumping in your seats then we advice you
to watch nightmare on bury campus . You will never
want to go school ever again. Walk down the corridor
alone or even lose your way in school. If you are a real
genius you will figure out what happens at the end but
hen you will turn dumb by getting it wrong so buy it to
act like a genius in the future.

15. Characters:

16. Pros and Cons
Pros:
I think I liked my script because it is not very scary but it
is just jumpy my peer assessment buddy (Chloe)said it
was it was expanded well and it had more information
then the rest.
Cons:
The cons are I still need props and costumes and need
characters. My peer assessment said I need to write
more questions.

18. Watch this if you
dare or if you
care…….